Sample 2
GI: Escaping the stereotypical assumptions tied to one's community.
LIT: Real - good kid m.A.A.d. city - Kendrick Lamar
Non-LIT: Dream Crazy - Nike
Connections to GI
- First explains importance and relevance of global issue.
- First introduces both texts in the position.
- Analysis of tone and musical terms that might not be understandable through text.
Structure
- Zoom in Non-Lit
- Zoom in Lit
- Zoom out Non-Lit
- Zoom out Lit
Evaluation of Authorial Choices
- Analyzing tone, repetition and diction.
- Provides evidence and effect, sometimes first effect then evidence.
- Always mentions line numbers of quoted lines.
- Line numbers allow for referral back to line without quoting the entire thing.
- Evaluation is mostly-surface level, and doesn't analyze many of the underlying themes, especially in the literary extract.
- Misses out on ideas such as peer-pressure and societal expectations which can coerce people into acting stereotypically.
Signposting
- Transitions somewhat abrupt, but uses signposting vocabulary.
Balance
- The IO is quite short, and kind of struggled to balance the zooming-out with the zooming-in sections.
- A more lengthy evaluation of the wider work and BOW could lead to a more cohesive IO.
Evaluation
Personal Grading
Criterion A: 5
Criterion B: 6
Criterion C: 3
Criterion D: 5
IB Grading
Criterion A: 6
Criterion B: 6
Criterion C: 5
Criterion D: 7
Sample 3
GI: How marginalized groups are shaped by cultural stereotypes
LIT: Backseat Freestyle - good kid m.A.A.d. city - Kendrick Lamar
Non-LIT: Evolution of Beauty in the Bikie Scene - Vice - Mahmood Fazal
Connections to GI
- Especially in the analysis of the non-lit extract, there is not much focus on the relevane to the GI.
Structure
- Zoom in Lit
- Zoom in Non-Lit
- Zoom out Non-Lit
- Zoom out Lit
Evaluation of Authorial Choices
- Analysis is surface-level and evidence is not used in-detail.
- Goes into some detail, such as in the analysis of the allusion to the Matrix.
- Some in-depth ideas are explored but needs more evidence.
- A lot more can be explored in the literary extract, such as specific word choice, diction and maybe even different sounds and musical techniques.
Signposting
- Signposting vocabulary is not used much but structure is developed in a way to make transitions smoother.
Balance
- The analysis is somewhat balanced, but more time could be spent on the zooming-out.
Evaluation
Personal Grading
Criterion A: 5
Criterion B: 4
Criterion C: 6
Criterion D: 7
IB Grading
Criterion A: 8
Criterion B: 8
Criterion C: 9
Criterion D: 9